Avens Dolor

Comments in red. The door slammed shut, grating slightly across the wooden floor. Avoid adverbs when at all possbile; besides, something either grates or it doesn't, right? A lock is ...

Comments in red! There is no world but here; there is no time but now. This would read better as two separate sentences, to slow down the reader. "There is ...

Comments in red. ***Prologue to a story I thought of in school, tell me what you think.*** The Letter There was a letter, and it was on his desk. Harry ...

Comments in red. If you’re looking for a fantastic adventure with magnificent creatures and wonderful knights in shining armor, then go away "then go away": I'd say that this might ...

This is a bit belated, I think, but I saw chapter two and figured I should read chapter one first, haha. I warn that my edits get pretty in-depth, so ...